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Moonflowers death

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I'm really proud with how this turned out, Bluepaws heads shape is a bit odd though, and Moonflowers body is, errm, a bit 'akward'
so other than that, yeah! ^^


EDIT: I fixed up one of Moonflowers ears a bit to make her pose a bit more fitting. ^^;

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:star::star::star::star::star-half: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star: Impact

You did a very good job on this peice. Let's start with the pros, hm?

<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletred:" title="Bullet; Red"/> Bluepaw's expression is great, you can really see the horror and despair on it.
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletred:" title="Bullet; Red"/> The blood looks great, quite realistic. I am seriously LOVING how you did the blood coming from Moonflowers throat, it's amazing <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="15" height="13" alt=":heart:" title="Heart"/>
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletred:" title="Bullet; Red"/> The anatomy is looking good too, you've got the shape of a cat's head down well, and Bluepaw's leg looks great.
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletred:" title="Bullet; Red"/> The background really looks good. I love how you did the stormy clouds and the bushes.
And the cons would probably be...
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletyellow:" title="Bullet; Yellow"/> Moonflower doesn't look that dead, just ticked off. I can see what you were going for, but I'm afraid you didn't quite capture it. Next time try drawing the eyes wide open and glazed over looking, and maybe have the mouthe open a little.
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletyellow:" title="Bullet; Yellow"/> Moonflower's anatomy looks sort of odd, and as you said in the description, a bit awkward looking. I'm not sure how you could fix this, maybe try to draw her front legs stretched out infront of her, instead of at her side?
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletyellow:" title="Bullet; Yellow"/> Though the paws look great, Bluepaws left front leg, the one furthest from the veiwer is a bit chubby looking compared to the other one. It may just be me, I'm not sure.
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletyellow:" title="Bullet; Yellow"/> There's a line beside Bluepaw's neck, I'm sure it's for her leg. If it is, then it's making it look as if her arm is coming from her head or her neck. It'd probably be better with out that line.

Well, that is my critique, first one too, so I'm not sure if I did well. XD Um...I guess I should just end it here, huh?
Well...uh..bye! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/w/w…" width="25" height="20" alt=":wave:" title="Hi!"/>